Here I am again, sorry I missed the last couple weeks. Continuing to post from my novel-in-progress, working title Night Shift. This is for Weekend Writing Warriors – which, as you may know, is an awesome blog hop not just for writers, but readers too. Just about every genre is represented, so please do have a look at the other excerpts from fantastic writers.
For this week’s excerpt, I’m staying in the same scene. Previous excerpts are here and here. The first person speaking is Kazimir, who is Devorah’s (our heroine) mentor. This bit explains what drives Devorah throughout the novel.
“I thought you and Azura went shopping,” he said. “What happened to your dirty-blonde hair?”
“I’m water-aligned, so yeah, blue streaks. Listen, Azura spilled a lot of beans. Something’s going on upstairs that us soldiers aren’t supposed to know about, and our demon group might have something to do with my dad’s death. That might be why the cops’ investigation stalled. This might be the break I’ve been waiting for.”
This is still very much a work in progress. Some of my current critiquers are still expressing some confusion over events in the first chapter, so I fully expect that to be reworked a bunch of times.
The issue of names continues to be something of an issue for some folks. Some are telling me the first chapter verges on having too many, others say they really want the main character’s name in the first scene (and some say they don’t care), some want to know who everybody is right away and how they all relate to each other. Ihhh, this is chapter ONE, guys. If I explain the relationships right now, then I’ll be told the chapter bogs down.
Writing is hard, and sometimes reading is too, apparently!
Please keep your fingers crossed that the dreaded Lake Effect Snow Machine only cranks up to the lowest level this week. I’ve had enough of the cold white stuff to last sixty years! And thanks for visiting my little blog.